An attempt at Triveni, that also reflects the current state of mind. Actually it is more the latter than the former. Gulzaar Sir, maaf karna :D
Kuchh waqt se zindagi kuchh bhatak si rahi thi
Najaane kahaan se achaanak aashiyaan mil gaya
Upar kahin kisi ko shaayad taras aa raha tha!
Wah wah wah!!!! bahut khoob!
ReplyDelete"upar kisi ko shayad taras aa raha tha!"
am surprised ki you liked it
ReplyDeletebut dhanyawaad!
Hey..thanks for writing this. I didn't know that something like Triveni existed! It's exciting!
ReplyDeleteexciting it is indeed.. you should read all trivenis that Gulzar has written .. you will find many on the web and most of them are wonderful creations.
ReplyDeleteI think it might even be a fun( though, probably difficult) activity to transform existing couplets into trivenis i.e. adding the third line on your own.
Oh, aapne socha ki isSe pehle ki log mera blog padh padh ke bhagwan me vishwas karna chhod dein, Uski mahima ko reinstate kiya jaaye!! :D
ReplyDeleteNice attempt at triveni.. waise I guess the omission of 'kahin' in EO's comment is a suggestion worth looking into. Can't say for sure though. :)
wah .. maine is angle se socha nahi tha.. iska taatparya ye hua ki bhagwaan ki mahima pe sansaar ka vishwaas is baat pe nirbhar karta hai ki tumhara blog zyaada popular hai ya mera .. ghor kalyug :D
ReplyDeleteI thought a little about the "kahin" after your comment. This is what I concluded. DTPH had such a great impact on me that it's tagline "Someone somewhere is made for you" was embedded deep into my psyche. Now when we talk of God, although it is a different entity than the one being talked about in that tagline, the uncertainty is kind of similar, so God to me is "Someone, Somewhere" and I can't really do without the "somewhere" (kahin). Isse zyaada nahi bolna chaahiye nahi to public joote maaregi :D
Amazing, as always!
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ReplyDeletePS: I still don't use the T word :D